Well, take a deep breath and try to read this:
What's wrong with a point, William? Or short phrases, simplicity and clarity in the expression of a story? Insurance the editor told you to limit yourself to a paragraph . But what is wrong, and brought to challenge the boss, choose a single subject to a sentence and stay with him until the end? What is so disgraceful in trying to have a single verb tense in the final pastiche? (What's wrong is in claiming to be a hairdresser but loudly, give it to shock you, or not paying, so bad that he got a hairstyle, I wonder? But that is another matter, a little harder to ramble, and certainly not those of the author of this crime.) Other:
Criminals, all. The ill-groomed, Grandpa, but also William, with paragraphs kept alive at the point of commas ...